List five words that describe your characteristics.

2021-12-13 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

학생이 쓴 원문

Friendly, result-driven, analytical, cogent, and enthusiastic best describe me. As a Korean, I have eight years of experience living abroad. These characteristics allowed me to comprehend the demand of people from different cultural backgrounds, which was transferred to the professional experience. At Willis Towers Watson, I managed 60 accounts with five industries. Since the participation rate of five sectors was behind our competitors, I implemented three tactics. First, I occasionally held meeting with the customers to build rapport with the clients. Secondly, I provided additional analysis to customers. Initially, the company only offered a consolidated compensation dataset, which made many clients have an issue of interpretation. Therefore, I provided another report to assist their understanding. Finally, I followed up with customers regarding participation even with unfavorable results to forge a trust-based relationship. Eventually, I increased participation to 50%.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for this Aciel!

Friendly, result-driven, analytical, cogent, and enthusiastic best describe me. 
>>> correct 
As a Korean, I have eight years of experience living abroad. 
>>> correct  
These characteristics allowed me to comprehend the demand of people from different cultural backgrounds, which was transferred to the professional experience. 
>>> These characteristics allowed me to comprehend to the demands of people from different cultural backgrounds, which was transferred to the professional experience.   
At Willis Towers Watson, I managed 60 accounts with five industries. 
>>>  correct  
Since the participation rate of five sectors was behind our competitors, I implemented three tactics. 
>>> correct  
First, I occasionally held meeting with the customers to build rapport with the clients. 
>>> correct  
>>> OR: First, I occasionally held meeting with the customers to build rapport with them.   
Secondly, I provided additional analysis to customers. Initially, the company only offered a consolidated compensation dataset, which made many clients have an issue of interpretation. 
>>> correct   
Therefore, I provided another report to assist their understanding. 
>>> correct   
Finally, I followed up with customers regarding participation even with unfavorable results to forge a trust-based relationship. 
>>> correct  
Eventually, I increased participation to 50%.
>>> OR: Eventually, I increased the participation rate to 50%. 

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