Listen music
학생이 쓴 원문
Whenever I walk in a road, I listen to music through earphone. It doesn\'t makes me feel boring while walking. There are lots of music genre so I can enjoy one of them depending of my mood at that time. When I feel sad, I used to listen ballade music. Some people think this is weird because it would make our feeling more sad. However by doing this, I fall into my current feeling and I would get courage to overcome this feeling.
강사 첨삭
Hi John!
I need you to concentrate on the use of pronouns.
You don\'t have to repeat the same words in different sentences.
You can make shortcuts using pronouns.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Whenever I walk in a road, I listen to music through earphone.
>> Whenever I walk on the street, I listen to music using my earphones.
It doesn\'t makes me feel boring while walking.
>> It keeps me from feeling bored while walking.
There are lots of music genre so I can enjoy one of them depending of my mood at that time.
>> There are lots of music genre so I can enjoy one of them depending on my mood at that time.
When I feel sad, I used to listen ballade music.
>> Whenever I feel sad, I listen to ballads.
Some people think this is weird because it would make our feeling more sad.
>> Some people think this is weird because it would make me feel sadder.
However by doing this, I fall into my current feeling and I would get courage to overcome this feeling.
>> However by doing this, I could get to the bottom of what I am feeling and overcome it.
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