Live in a house or an apartment?

2013-11-13 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I occasionally dream of living in a house that is located in a hill, surrounded by beautiful mountains and provides a good view. The house has a rosy garden filled with green grasses, trees, and flowers. There is a bench in the garden where you can overlook a long and winding river and sometimes you can enjoy a cup of coffee with your lovely family, admiring the great scenery of a spectacular sunset. Staying away from cities, you can stand on the hill and feel a wind touching your chin softly while birds are singing beside you. However I know it is not a real, but the life that I have seen in the movie. The reality is that there are so many concerns that bother you to live in a house. Firstly, to live in such a location, you should drive a long way like at least for two or three hours one way if you have a job in a city. Secondly, you should give up the benefits that the city life is offering like shopping, seeing a movie, and socializing with your friends. -- to be confinued -

강사 첨삭

Hi there^^ It is sure nice to live in that kind of place it will give us peace of mind. Anyway, I made some correction please find time to review it^^ See you later^^ Teacher Nina^^ I occasionally dream of living in a house that is located in a hill, surrounded by beautiful mountains and provides a good view. >> I occasionally dream of living in a house located in a hill, surrounded by a beautiful mountains and has a good view. The house has a rosy garden filled with green grasses, trees, and flowers. >> CORRECT!! There is a bench in the garden where you can overlook a long and winding river and sometimes you can enjoy a cup of coffee with your lovely family, admiring the great scenery of a spectacular sunset. >> There is a bench in the garden with an overlooking view of the long and winding river while enjoying a cup of coffee with your lovely family. And also admiring the great scenery of a spectacular sunset. Staying away from cities, you can stand on the hill and feel a wind touching your chin softly while birds are singing beside you. >> Staying away from the cities, standing on the hill and feeling the wind touching your chin softly while birds are singing beside you. However I know it is not a real, but the life that I have seen in the movie. >> However, I know that it is not real and I only seen it in movies. The reality is that there are so many concerns that bother you to live in a house. >> The reality is that there are many things that bother you living in a house. Firstly, to live in such a location, you should drive a long way like at least for two or three hours one way if you have a job in a city. >> First, living in such location, you will drive for a long time for atleast two or three hours to go to your job in the city. >> OR: First, living in such location, you will drive for a long time for atleast two or three hours to report for work in the city. Secondly, you should give up the benefits that the city life is offering like shopping, seeing a movie, and socializing with your friends. -- to be confinued - >> Second, you should give up the benefits that the city life is offering, like shopping, seeing a movie and socializing with your friends.

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