Living
학생이 쓴 원문
Theme: [ESSAY] What do you think about living for over a hundred years?
I think it\'s good.
But when i\'m not healthy, I think it\'s not good.
I think living over a hundred years and being healthy is the most good thing!
When i\'m not healthy and I am fighting against a disease but I\'m over 100 years old, I think dieing is better.
I think living over a hundred years and being healthy is the most good thing!
강사 첨삭
Here\'s your last corrected homework this week, [이름]. Also, please pay attention to the expressions I used as an alternative to \"I think\" so you can avoid repeating that phrase.
Catch you next week!
Cheers,
Jean
Theme: [ESSAY] What do you think about living for over a hundred years?
I think it\'s good.
>> OR: Personally, I think it\'s a good thing.
But when i\'m not healthy, I think it\'s not good.
>> But when I\'m not healthy, I don\'t think it\'s something I\'d like to experience.
I think living over a hundred years and being healthy is the most good thing!
>> In my opinion, living over a hundred years and being healthy is the most ideal situation!
When i\'m not healthy and I am fighting against a disease but I\'m over 100 years old, I think dieing is better. [Please note the spelling of the word \"dying\".]
>> When I\'m not in good health and I am fighting against some disease but I\'m over 100 years old, I believe dying is better.
I think living over a hundred years and being healthy is the most good thing!
>> Therefore, living over a hundred years with a healthy body is the best thing!
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