Living alone

2015-04-15 · 첨삭 강사 Klein

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I'd like to write about the topic of 'living alone' which I heard from the radio in my car while coming back from my company. These days people who choose to live alone are increasing. Many sinle women tend to refuse to get married in order to make achievements in their professional jobs or to be independent from family members. In addition, a lot of old people have no choice but living by themselves because their family members are not well-off enough to support them financially or the old people might be abandoned by their family members. The increasing numbers of people who are living alone reflect the serious changes of our family structure and the relationships among family members. People in our society are getting more individualized and most of them don't want to be engaged in the obligational boundary of the family. This change could make a very problematic situation in near future. People try to live single and don't have a child. Seriously they have to die alone.

강사 첨삭

Greetings [이름]! Thank you for dropping by the composition board. Honestly, every word that you wrote here hit me big time! I\'m guessing you did that on purpose. I ought to thank you for doing so. This is but one of the changes on our society. Our set of priorities has changed as well. Every now and then, we are influenced by so many things. I hope that I can get to receive many more of this sort of composition from you. A bunch of thanks [이름]! You already asked me earlier how many times I would say thank you. I cannot stop myself because I\'m really grateful for every bit of idea that you share with me. I hope you are having a wonderful time, because I am. Spend your time wisely with your beloved family. Stay safe and catch you later! _Klein I\'d like to write about the topic of \'living alone\' which I heard from the radio in my car while coming back from my company. These days people who choose to live alone are increasing. >>Correct Many sinle women tend to refuse to get married in order to make achievements in their professional jobs or to be independent from family members. >>Correct [single] In addition, a lot of old people have no choice but living by themselves because their family members are not well-off enough to support them financially or the old people might be abandoned by their family members. >>CorrectThe increasing numbers of people who are living alone reflect the serious changes of our family structure and the relationships among family members. People in our society are getting more individualized and most of them don\'t want to be engaged in the obligational boundary of the family. This change could make a very problematic situation in near future. People try to live single and don\'t have a child. Seriously they have to die alone. >>Correct

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