Living without TV for a week
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I usually turn on TV on morning, but after watching TV I can\'t do anything. When I tried not to turning on TV, I planned my daily life and I did my work. I think I could live without TV for a week. Also I could see the news by computer and cellphone. Nowadays TV isn\'t the only media we can see. We can enjoy other media as same as TV. So I could live without TV for a week, because time goes fast for a week.
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Hello, [이름]!
Good evening!
Thank you for submitting your composition.
I agree with your answer. We have a lot of options these days. ^^
I hope that you will have a wonderful night. ^^
~Teacher Gina
>> I usually turn on the TV in the morning but after watching TV, I can\'t do anything.
When I tried not to turning on TV, I planned my daily life and I did my work.
>> When I tried not turning on the TV, I was able to plan my daily life and do my work.
I think I could live without TV for a week.
>> CORRECT.
Also I could see the news by computer and cellphone.
>> I could also see the news on my computer and cellphone.
Nowadays TV isn\'t the only media we can see.
>> Nowadays, TV isn\'t just the only form of media we can use.
We can enjoy other media as same as TV.
>> We can enjoy other media which are the same as a TV.
So I could live without TV for a week, because time goes fast for a week.
>> CORRECT.
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