Long time no write(?)

2012-01-25 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

학생이 쓴 원문

hello, Ms. [Name]! Long time no talk. You sent the holiday well? And me, too.... but.... I'm sorry, Ms. [Name]! Because maybe you want me to write some interesting thing about Lunar New Year but I can't. Because it is not the vacation but the just holiday. And this day is existed the responsibility at an adult people. About visiting the older man, giving the money for children, driving a whole day and so on. Anyway, this holiday is making so tired an almost grown up person but so enjoy and hope the children. Because they become a rich man. And if they perform some trouble, this day is O.K maybe not big it! Says the one, Lunar New Year is heaven of children but never an adult. Anyway, until now was a complaint of the adult. Tnank you for reading!

강사 첨삭

Hello, Sir Steve! Thank you so much for your composition today! I had a wonderful time during the holiday because I was able to do the things that I can\'t do on regular weekdays. It\'s too bad that you had a tiring holiday. Don\'t worry, we\'re back to work, you\'ll earn what you\'ve spent during the lunar new year . Have a great time and I\'ll talk with you later. T. JanE ^^   Hello, Ms. [Name]!>> Correct.Long time no talk.>> Correct.You sent the holiday well?>> Did you spend the holiday well?And me, too.... but....>> I had a good time.I\'m sorry, Ms. [Name]!>> Correct.Because maybe you want me to write some interesting thing about Lunar New Year but I can\'t.>> You wanted me to write about an interesting thing about the Lunar New Year, but I can\'t.Because it is not the vacation but the just holiday.>> It was not a vacation for me, it was just a holiday.And this day is existed the responsibility at an adult people.>> On this holiday, adults have many responsibilities.About visiting the older man, giving the money for children, driving a whole day and so on.>> These include visiting our elders, giving money to children, driving the whole day and so on.Anyway, this holiday is making so tired an almost grown up person but so enjoy and hope the children.>> Anyway, this holiday make adults tired, but it gives an enjoyable time to children.Because they become a rich man.>> Children are rich on this holiday.And if they perform some trouble, this day is O.K maybe not big it!>> In addition, if they make some trouble on this holiday, it isn\'t a big deal.Says the one, Lunar New Year is heaven of children but never an adult.>> Others say that Lunar New Year is for children, not for adults.Anyway, until now was a complaint of the adult.>> Anyway, this is my complain as an adult.Thank you for reading! >> Correct.

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