lottery
학생이 쓴 원문
I deeply appriciate your kindness today.
honestly I was frustrated last weekend. ^^;;
Actually, I repeat numerous time to think to won the lottery.:)
If I would have that too much money, first of all, I'll quit my job. ha ha ;;
You know, working at the bank can't make me feel worthy.
that is sort of nullify me.
Anyway, Then I go on a trip all aver the world on my own.
Through this trip, I can get a lot of things and learn many things.
And second, as you know I have been empasis on sharing my life with other poeple.
What I do, is serve to poor poeple.
Just imaging like this, It makes me happy.
I have to go out to buy lottery ticket, right now! ha ha.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
Hahaha! Well, I have been thinking of winning the lottery many times too!
But I seldom buy lottery tickets. So how will I win?
This is a nice thought, [이름]. Thank you.
Anyway, kindly go over the corrections and let me know if you have questions.
Good night!
~Teacher Alice
I deeply appriciate your kindness today.
>> I deeply appreciate your kindness today.honestly I was frustrated last weekend. ^^
>> Honestly, I was frustrated last weekend. ^^Actually, I repeat numerous time to think to won the lottery.:)
>> Actually, I thought of winning the lottery many times. :)
If I would have that too much money, first of all, I\'ll quit my job. ha ha ;;
>> If I would have too much money, first of all, I would quit my job. ha ha ;;You know, working at the bank can\'t make me feel worthy.
>> Correct!that is sort of nullify me.
>> That sort of nullifies me.Anyway, Then I go on a trip all aver the world on my own.
>> Then I would go on a trip all over the world by myself.Through this trip, I can get a lot of things and learn many things.
>> Correct!And second, as you know I have been empasis on sharing my life with other poeple.What I do, is serve to poor poeple.
>> Secondly, as you know I have emphasized on sharing my life with other poeple.What I do, is serve to poor poeple.
>> What I do is to serve other people.Just imaging like this, It makes me happy.
>> Just imagining like this, it makes me happy.
>> OR: It makes me happy just by imagining this.I have to go out to buy lottery ticket, right now! ha ha.
>> Correct!
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