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2013-01-22 · 첨삭 강사 Alice

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I deeply appriciate your kindness today. honestly I was frustrated last weekend. ^^;; Actually, I repeat numerous time to think to won the lottery.:) If I would have that too much money, first of all, I'll quit my job. ha ha ;; You know, working at the bank can't make me feel worthy. that is sort of nullify me. Anyway, Then I go on a trip all aver the world on my own. Through this trip, I can get a lot of things and learn many things. And second, as you know I have been empasis on sharing my life with other poeple. What I do, is serve to poor poeple. Just imaging like this, It makes me happy. I have to go out to buy lottery ticket, right now! ha ha.

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Hi [이름]! Hahaha! Well, I have been thinking of winning the lottery many times too! But I seldom buy lottery tickets. So how will I win? This is a nice thought, [이름]. Thank you. Anyway, kindly go over the corrections and let me know if you have questions. Good night! ~Teacher Alice I deeply appriciate your kindness today. >> I deeply appreciate your kindness today.honestly I was frustrated last weekend. ^^ >> Honestly, I was frustrated last weekend. ^^Actually, I repeat numerous time to think to won the lottery.:) >> Actually, I thought of winning the lottery many times. :) If I would have that too much money, first of all, I\'ll quit my job. ha ha ;; >> If I would have too much money, first of all, I would quit my job. ha ha ;;You know, working at the bank can\'t make me feel worthy. >> Correct!that is sort of nullify me. >> That sort of nullifies me.Anyway, Then I go on a trip all aver the world on my own. >> Then I would go on a trip all over the world by myself.Through this trip, I can get a lot of things and learn many things. >> Correct!And second, as you know I have been empasis on sharing my life with other poeple.What I do, is serve to poor poeple. >> Secondly, as you know I have emphasized on sharing my life with other poeple.What I do, is serve to poor poeple. >> What I do is to serve other people.Just imaging like this, It makes me happy. >> Just imagining like this, it makes me happy. >> OR: It makes me happy just by imagining this.I have to go out to buy lottery ticket, right now! ha ha. >> Correct!

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