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YOU SAY:

Last Friday was my senior high school\'s birthday.

BETTER SAY:

Last Friday was my Senior High Schools Alumni gathering.

YOU SAY:

We gather the school whole alumnae that day.

BETTER SAY:

The whole alumni gathered in the school that day.

YOU SAY:

Usually the end of performance we draw the winning lottery numbers.

BETTER SAY:

Usually at the end of all the performances we will draw the winning lottery numbers.

YOU SAY:

Several years ago one of my friends received a big TV set.

BETTER SAY:

Several years ago on of my friends won a big television set.

YOU SAY:

I attended the ceremony in the morning but my son called me \"please come to 포항 for take care of baby\"

BETTER SAY:

I attended the ceremony in the morning but my son called me and asked me to take care of his baby.

YOU SAY:

I have to leave the place so I gave my ticket to my friend.

BETTER SAY:

I had to leave the place and so I gave my ticket to my friend.

YOU SAY:

\"You are lucky woman, you were already picked the TV. I expect a nice present Today\"

BETTER SAY:

I told my friend \" You are a lucky woman, you already won before. and so I am expecting a nice present for me today.\"

YOU SAY:

Next day she called me \"Your number was chosen and the present was 230,000 won blanket\"

BETTER SAY:

The next day, she called me, \"Your number was chosen and the present was a blanket worth  230,00 won.\"

YOU SAY:

Wow! it was my first experience, I never win the lottery in my life.

BETTER SAY:

Wow! It was my first experience. I never won the lottery in my life.