Lottery is a great invention.

2014-08-01 · 첨삭 강사 Debby

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Many people pay money to buy the lottery and half of the money is used to help the poor. It is the most effective way to collect charity money. Of course, it is not their will but helpful to society. In addition, some people buy the lottery too much but most buy the lottery for fun. Therefore I think lottery is innovative invention.

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Hi the Yun Ho!^^ Where do you get these ideas? I have a feeling you would make a good English teacher in the future if you want to. Hahahahaha. The title is great! And your ideas convinced me that Lottery is a great invention. I have to agree on that! Have a great weekend!^^ Take care^^ T.Debby^^ Here are my corrections for you today: Many people pay money to buy the lottery and half of the money is used to help the poor. >> CORRECT OR> Many people buy the tickets and half of the earnings go to charity.It is the most effective way to collect charity money. >> CORRECT OR> It\'s an easy way for people to get money for the less fortunate.Of course, it is not their will but helpful to society. >> Of course, it is not their will but helpful to the society.In addition, some people buy the lottery too much but most buy the lottery for fun. >>In addition, some people buy the lottery too much but most would buy the lottery for fun.Therefore I think lottery is innovative invention. >> CORRECT OR> That\'s why for me, lottery is an amazing invention.

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