Lottle World
학생이 쓴 원문
Today, I went to Lottle World with my friends.
There were so many people in 2pm!! My friends said that there were more people at that time compared to weekends.
So, we only ride 2 things.
First we rode the king viking. This was my first time riding the viking. So I was half excitement and half fear. I sat at the middle of the viking. Still, when it goes high, it is different from watching. I can feel the wind when I go backward and forward. I closed my eyes in the highest part!! My younger sister can ride the viking, sitting in the end part and raises her two hands!!.
Next, we rode the adventures of sindbad. It goes down only two times!! and very slow. So, me and my friends sat at the very first part and almost laid on the seats. TOO boring.
Today was a fun day!!
강사 첨삭
Hi Joey,
I hate the Viking. I don't know why some people like that ride. I felt sick after getting off of it, plus it was scary just watching it. Talk to you again tomorrow.
-RJ
Today, I went to Lottle World with my friends.>>Today, I went to Lotte World with my friends.
There were so many people in 2pm!! My friends said that there were more people at that time compared to weekends.
>>There were so many people at 2pm!! My friends said that there were more people at that time compared to the weekends.
So, we only ride 2 things.
>>So we only got on 2 rides.
First we rode the king viking. This was my first time riding the viking. So I was half excitement and half fear.
>>First, we rode the King Viking. This was my first time riding the viking. So I was half excited and half scared.
I sat at the middle of the viking. Still, when it goes high, it is different from watching. I can feel the wind when I go backward and forward.
>>I sat at the middle of the viking. It is different from just watching it. I can feel the wind when I go backward and forward.
I closed my eyes in the highest part!! My younger sister can ride the viking, sitting in the end part and raises her two hands!!.
>>I closed my eyes in the highest part!! My younger sister can ride the viking, sitting at the edge and raising her two hands!!.
Next, we rode the adventures of sindbad. It goes down only two times!! and very slow.
Next, we rode the adventures of sindbad. It goes down only two times!! and very slow.
>>Next, we rode the adventures of Sindbad. It goes down only two times!! and it's very slow.
So, me and my friends sat at the very first part and almost laid on the seats. TOO boring.
>>So, me and my friends sat at the very front and almost laid down on the seats. TOO boring.
Today was a fun day!!
Today was a fun day!!
>>correct
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