Love Story

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Good evening and happy Tuesday! ^.^

I think the love that Ryu and Soo had for each other was really true.

They proved that age didn\'t matter that time.

Furthermore, they cared a lot for each other.

However, I am not sure if they had a happy life together knowing that people around them were against their relationship.

It was like, \"You and me against the world.\"

Anyway, I really admire them.

I hope to have a love like theirs.

What they had is genuine. ^^

That\'s all for now! ^^

Happy reading! ^^,

See you very soon! ^^.

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

P.S.: Thank you for the sharing! ^.^

There was an unbelievable love story in China, which was known as a husband and his wife who is older than her husband had been lived for more than 50 years together.

>> There was an unbelievable love story in China, which was as a husband and his wife who is older than him lived for more than 50 years together.

1. Avoid redundancy. It is better not to repeat HUSBAND.

2. HAD BEEN LIVED is wrong. There is HAD LIVED, but it is used when there are two happenings that are being connected.

A grandfather who died at 70 years old age in the cave made 6000 steps by hand in the mountain for his wife.

>> A grandfather who died at the age of 70 in the cave made 6000 steps by hand in the mountain for his wife.

3. It is correct to use AT THE AGE OF 70 than AT 70 YEARS OLD AGE.

50 year ago from now, 19 years old young man named Ryu fell in love with a widow named Soo who is 10 years older than young man.

>> 50 years ago, a 19 years old man named Ryu fell in love with a wodow name Soo who is 10 years older than him.

>> OR: 50 years ago, a young man who is 19 years old and named Ryu fell in love with a widow name Soo who is 10 years older than him.

4. There is no need to put FROM NOW.

5. YOUNG should be removed before MAN since 19 YEARS OLD is already there.

6. Avoid redundancy. Don\'t use YOUNG MAN twice.

Like a Romeo and Juliet in Shakespeare, all of his friends and relatives blamed their love for their age difference and she already had her children.

>> Like Romeo and Juliet in Shakespeare, all of his friends and relatives blamed their love to their age difference and to the fact that she already had children.

7. PATTERN: blame something to someone

They decided to run away and live hide themselves in the cave to avoid the eyes of others.

>> They decided to run away and hide themselves in the cave to avoid the eyes of others.

>> OR: They decided to run away and hide themselves in the cave to avoid the eyes of other people.

8. It is better to remove LIVE.

At first, they had trouble with no food and electricity.

>> CORRECT!

Soo asked Ryu many times whether he regreted it, and Ryu always said exactly same answer \" we will be better\".

>> Soo asked Ryu many times whether he regretted it, and he always said exactly the same answer, \"We will be better.\"

9. Avoid redundancy. RYU in the sentence should be mentioned once.

10. There should be a COMMA after ANSWER.

11. The DOT should be placed after BETTER.

Ryu began to make steps by hand for his wife to go up and down the mountain for 50 years.

>> CORRECT!

An adventurer found it by accident and surprised at 6000 hand made steps.

>> An adventurer found it by accident and was surprised at the 6000 handmade steps.

>> OR: An adventurer found it by accident, and he was surprised at the 6000 handmade steps.

12.  There should be WAS before SURPRISED.

13. THE should be written before 6000 HANDMADE steps.