lunar new year's day

2017-01-31 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

학생이 쓴 원문

Good afternoon teacher. Today I will tell you about my lunar new year's day story. 0n lunar new year's day I went to my grand parents house. And I ate delicious food. and I bow to my grand parents. My grant parents gave me the money. I was happy. And I watched a television and I play a game it was very fun and exciting.

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!

I am very much sure that you en[이름]ed your holidays.

So, just stay happy.

Anyway, I am going to call you again tomorrow.

En[이름] the rest of your afternoon.

~Teacher Chloe

Good afternoon teacher.

>>Good afternoon, teacher.
Today I will tell you about my lunar new year\'s day story.

>>Today, I am going to tell you about my Lunar New Year story.
0n lunar new year\'s day I went to my grand parents house.

>>I was at my grandparents\' house during the Lunar New Year.
 And I ate delicious food. and I bow to my grand parents.

>>I bowed to my grandparents and ate delicious food.
 My grant parents gave me the money.
>>They gave me some money.  

I was happy.

>>Correct!
And I watched a television and I play a game it was very fun and exciting.

>>I watched television and played games. It was very fun and exciting.

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