Magical Adventure
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Theme : [ESSAY] What\'s the best magical adventure you can think of?
I think it is \'s Hogwart battle.
In the Hogwart battle,It was Voldmort vs Hogwart\'s students and professers.
It is wizard\'s war so many people died and Harry Potter was almost dead.
But in the end, Voldmort died and Hogwart won.
I think \'s Hogwart battle is the best magical adventure I can think of!
(But I think it isn\'t \'Best\'....)
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Here\'s your corrected composition, [이름]!
Again, please pay attention to the corrections, including the spelling of some words. Catch you on Monday!
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Jean~~
Theme : [ESSAY] What\'s the best magical adventure you can think of?
I think it is \'s Hogwart battle.
>> I think it is the Hogwarts Battle.
In the Hogwart battle,It was Voldmort vs Hogwart\'s students and professers.
>> In the Hogwarts Battle, it was a fight between Voldemort vs Hogwarts\' students and professors. [Note the spelling of \"Voldemort\" and \"professor\".]
It is wizard\'s war so many people died and Harry Potter was almost dead.
>> It was a wizard\'s war so many people died and even Harry Potter was also almost killed.
But in the end, Voldmort died and Hogwart won.
>> But in the end, Voldemort died and Hogwarts won.
I think \'s Hogwart battle is the best magical adventure I can think of!
(But I think it isn\'t \'Best\'....)
>> I think the Hogwarts Battle is the best magical adventure I can think of!
(But if you ask me, it isn\'t the \'Best\'....)
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