Make a list of 10 animals you would like to have a pet.

2016-12-20 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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10 animals that I want to have as a pet is First is a stag beetle because I have a pet stag beetle now too. the stag beetle that I have in my home is boy. I want to have a girl stag beetle too. The boy stag beetle name is Robin but he doesn't got married so I think he is really sad so I want a girl stag beetle. Second animal that I want to as a pet is a goldfish when I was 2 grade I had goldfishes I had really many goldfish but now I don't have it because all of them died. I like to take care of goldfish and play with them so I like goldefish. Third is a hamster in my friends house I saw a hamster it is really cute. and only things to do with hamster is take a hamster shower ond give them a food. Forth thing I want to have a pet is a cute dog. In my best friend house there has a dog named rose it is really cute and do many things with my friend and me. Fifth pet is chick can be my friend so I like it. Sixth is a kitten.Seventhis a parrot. Eighth is a Uparupa. Nineth is hedgehog.

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10 animals that I want to have as a pet is First is a stag beetle because I have a pet stag beetle now too. the stag beetle that I have in my home is boy. I want to have a girl stag beetle too. The boy stag beetle name is Robin but he doesn\'t got married so I think he is really sad so I want a girl stag beetle. Second animal that I want to as a pet is a goldfish when I was 2 grade I had goldfishes I had really many goldfish but now I don\'t have it because all of them died.
I like to take care of goldfish and play with them so I like goldefish.
Third is a hamster in my friends house I saw a hamster it is really cute.
and only things to do with hamster is take a hamster shower ond give them a food.
Forth thing I want to have a pet is a cute dog. In my best friend house there has a dog named rose it is really cute and do many things with my friend and me.
Fifth pet is chick can be my friend so I like it.
Sixth is a kitten.Seventhis a parrot. Eighth is a Uparupa. Nineth is hedgehog.


>> I only have 9 animals that I would like to have as pets. First, I would like to have a stag beetle; preferably a female one because I already have a male stag beetle as a pet. My pet\'s name is Robin and I think he is sad because he doesn\'t have a partner. Second, I would like to have as a pet is a goldfish because when I was in second grade, I had some goldfishes but they all died even if I took care of them. The third animal I would keep as a pet is a hamster because they are really cute and they are easy to take care of, like, giving them showers and food. A dog would be my fourth choice because my best friend has a dog and its really cute and can do a lot of things with my friend and I. The fourth, fifth and sixth animals would be a chick, a kitten and a parrot. The eight animal I\'d like to keep as a pet is the Mexican salamander or Uparupa in Japan. The last one or the ninth is a hedgehog.

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