Make a short essay about your idol.

I’ll write about my father as my Idol. He is very strong and charismatic person. When I was young, I was scared my father. But while growing up, I could understand him. My grandfather passed away when my father was only 13-year-old. After he passed away, My grandmother had to earn money, and couldn’t take care of her 3 children. So my father and aunt and uncle lived in poverty. My father studied very hard and he got a scholarship for 4 years in university. After graduation, he work so sincerely and became a regional director in china office. I admire and am proud of him.

I am touched by your story. 

Your father really worked hard to be on top and you should really be proud of him.

I hope you told him about that.

He will be very happy to hear you say that to him. 

T. Anne

I’ll write about my father as my Idol. He is very strong and charismatic person.

>>I will write about my father since he is my idol. He is very strong and charismatic.

When I was young, I was scared my father.

>> When I was young, I was scared of my father.

But while growing up, I could understand him.

>>But while growing up, I am starting to understand him.

My grandfather passed away when my father was only 13-year-old.

>>Correct!

After he passed away, my grandmother had to earn money, and couldn’t take care of her 3 children. 

>>correct!

So my father and aunt and uncle lived in poverty.

>>So my father\'s siblings lived in poverty.
My father studied very hard and he got a scholarship for 4 years in university.

>>My father studied very hard and he got a 4-year scholarship in a University.

After graduation, he work so sincerely and became a regional director in china office.

>> After graduating, he worked so sincerely and became the regional director of China.

I admire and am proud of him.

>>Correct!