Make a short essay: What is the most important lesson a person should learn in life?
학생이 쓴 원문
When it comes to the most important lesson in my life, It is impossilbe not to mention a word " a pursuit of happniess". Everyone has a right to chase it. Also, The Constitution gives people the right to pursue happiness. Therefore, one's happiness seems to be a intrinsic value in human being. In this sense, some promblem comes to the surface. Because there are too many ways to get a goal, sometimes they may clash with each other in one's way to go to their destination. So, we should know how to respect and appreciate differences between people. And i think this is not the same as something we can learn from the textbook, so we have to make ourselves exposed many strange and new circumstances. Then, we will be exposed to many different values and find one's proper value they should follow in their future. Anyhow, what i want to say to this question is that we have to experience many things as much as possible before we become complacent to this world.
강사 첨삭
Hello there!!
TGI Friday~~
Thanks for this composition as well! :) Kindly check the corrections I made for you.
It\'s true that happiness is really very important and I totally agree when you said that everybody is entitled to it.
As for me, I think, happiness is achieved if you have less expectations and commit yourself more to something you really love.
Sacrifices are also inevitable! Find your happiness and always live to the fullest everyday.^^
Keep being happy by starting with a smile! :)
Anyway, have a great weekend ahead of you.
See you in class!
T.Alice
When it comes to the most important lesson in my life, It is impossilbe not to mention a word \" a pursuit of happniess\". >>CORRECT!! change \" a word\" into \"the word\"
Everyone has a right to chase it. Also, The Constitution gives people the right to pursue happiness.
>>Everyone has the right to chase it. CORRECT!!
Therefore, one\'s happiness seems to be a intrinsic value in human being. In this sense, some promblem comes to the surface. >>Therefore, one\'s happiness is an intrinsic value among human beings. In this sense, some problems surfaces naturally.
Because there are too many ways to get a goal, sometimes they may clash with each other in one\'s way to go to their destination.
>>Because there are many ways to get our goals, sometimes it clashes with other people\'s way in getting to their destinations.
So, we should know how to respect and appreciate differences between people.
>>CORRECT!!
>>or So, we should know how to respect and appreciate differences among people.
And i think this is not the same as something we can learn from the textbook, so we have to make ourselves exposed many strange and new circumstances.
>>And I think this is not the same as the things we could learn from textbooks so we have to expose ourselves to many strange and new circumstances.
Then, we will be exposed to many different values and find one\'s proper value they should follow in their future.
>> Then we will be exposed to different values for us to find that proper values that we should acquire in the future.
Anyhow, what i want to say to this question is that we have to experience many things as much as possible before we become complacent to this world.
>> Anyhow, what I am trying to say in this question is that we have to experience many things as much as possible before we become complacent in this world.
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