Make a short poem about your life.(Give at least 2 stanzas.)

2019-02-12 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

학생이 쓴 원문

Hmm... My poem ended up to an essay... ------------------- As my game is a relay, so I collaborate with other athletes. As long as my predecessor did his best, I will not criticize him with his record. Once I take over the batton, everything will be on me. I run and run with my heart being likely to pop, in order not to become another bad predecessor to my successor. My life is one link of a chain. Generation after generation, we hand over and take over. Even though I took over less, I will hand over a lot. A strong chain begins with a strong link.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!


This gave me goose bumps!

It\'s so good! ^^

Thank you for inspiring and motivating me to keep doing better.

I never would have thought that any of my students would have the same sentiment towards me as I do to them.

I will always be grateful for your existence. ^^


~~t. Ally




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As my game is a relay, so I collaborate with other athletes.

>> CORRECT!


 As long as my predecessor did his best, I will not criticize him with his record.

>> As long as my predecessor does his best, I will not criticize him with his records.


 Once I take over the batton, everything will be on me.

>> Once I take over the baton, everything will be up to me.


 I run and run with my heart being likely to pop, in order not to become another bad predecessor to my successor.
>> CORRECT!


 My life is one link of a chain.

>> CORRECT!


 Generation after generation, we hand over and take over.

>> CORRECT!


 Even though I took over less, I will hand over a lot.

>> CORRECT! (This is my favorite line)


 A strong chain begins with a strong link.

>> CORRECT!

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