Make up makes people beautiful
학생이 쓴 원문
Many students start make up, now.
It\'s because, they think make up makes them more beautiful.
That\'s true.
The make up makes better our complex of the face.
I think make up looks good in this point.
However, something is the most important than others.
That is a inside of our heart.
It is not important how pretty they are.
Therefore, the make up makes us beautiful, but the inside of our heart makes us more beautiful.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
Thank you for making the time to write today.
I know you\'re very busy.
Just continue doing your best and everything would turn out fine. ^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Many students start make up, now.
>> Many students start using make up at my age.
It\'s because, they think make up makes them more beautiful.
It\'s because, they think make up makes them more beautiful.
>> It\'s because they think make up makes them more beautiful.
That\'s true.
That\'s true.
>> Correct
The make up makes better our complex of the face.
The make up makes better our complex of the face.
>> Makeup covers spots on our face that we are not confident about.
I think make up looks good in this point.
I think make up looks good in this point.
>> I think make up is good based on this point.
However, something is the most important than others.
However, something is the most important than others.
>> However, we can\'t forget the most important thing.
That is a inside of our heart.
That is a inside of our heart.
>> That is what is inside our heart.
It is not important how pretty they are.
It is not important how pretty they are.
>> It is not important how pretty we are.
Therefore, the make up makes us beautiful, but the inside of our heart makes us more beautiful.
Therefore, the make up makes us beautiful, but the inside of our heart makes us more beautiful.
>> Therefore, make up makes us beautiful, but the inside of our heart makes us more beautiful.
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