Make your own story about cats aside from the story of Thunder and the Mysterious house. Be creative

2015-06-09 · 첨삭 강사 Kris

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There are a cute cats called BFJH(means big funny joke hero).BFJH is a cute cats. BFJH and their friends are live in New York. They are live in garbage.One day the man open a garbage and find the cats.The man bring cats to his house.And they lived together.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! ^^ :) Thank you for sharing your story about cats. It\'s short, it\'s good but it lacks creativity. Put a little twist in it. Make it more interesting. You want to be a director, right? I think creating stories could be one of the tasks that a director must do. It\'s like applying your wide range of imagination into it. Once again, be creative.   I\'ll see you in class, [이름]. Take care always. :)   ~~Teacher Kris     There are a cute cats called BFJH(means big funny joke hero). >> There are cute cats in a story entitled Big Funny Joke Hero (BFJH). BFJH is a cute cats. >> BFJH are cute cats. BFJH and their friends are live in New York. >> BFJH and their friends live in New York. They are live in garbage. >> They live in a stinky garbage. One day the man open a garbage and find the cats. >> One day, the man opened the grabage and found the cats. The man bring cats to his house. >> The man brought the cats into his house. And they lived together. >> And, they lived happily ever after.

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