Make your own story about cats aside from the story of Thunder and the Mysterious house. Be creative
학생이 쓴 원문
There are a cute cats called BFJH(means big funny joke hero).BFJH is a cute cats. BFJH and their friends are live in New York. They are live in garbage.One day the man open a garbage and find the cats.The man bring cats to his house.And they lived together.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! ^^ :)
Thank you for sharing your story about cats.
It\'s short, it\'s good but it lacks creativity. Put a little twist in it.
Make it more interesting. You want to be a director, right?
I think creating stories could be one of the tasks that a director must do.
It\'s like applying your wide range of imagination into it.
Once again, be creative.
I\'ll see you in class, [이름].
Take care always. :)
~~Teacher Kris
There are a cute cats called BFJH(means big funny joke hero).
>> There are cute cats in a story entitled Big Funny Joke Hero (BFJH).
BFJH is a cute cats.
>> BFJH are cute cats.
BFJH and their friends are live in New York.
>> BFJH and their friends live in New York.
They are live in garbage.
>> They live in a stinky garbage.
One day the man open a garbage and find the cats.
>> One day, the man opened the grabage and found the cats.
The man bring cats to his house.
>> The man brought the cats into his house.
And they lived together.
>> And, they lived happily ever after.
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