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2022-03-08 · 첨삭 강사 Aki

학생이 쓴 원문

Tradionally, we have respected the white color to social status and job fields. Even though society and world has changed, Koreans still have stereotypes. Unfortually young people prefer a stable and comfort life to challengeable life. They don\'t try to learn hardly like handmade Korean traditional arts technic and industrial expertise.

강사 첨삭

Hello Ms [이름]!
I guess this is a global issue. Many young people do not want to experience hardship. Sadly, this is the product of technology. 
I hope that you are always well~
Aki~

Traditionally, we have respected the white color to social status and job fields.
>>> Traditionally, we have respected the white color for social status and job fields.

Even though society and world has changed, Koreans still have stereotypes.
>>>Even though the society and world have changed, Koreans still have stereotypes.

Unfortually young people prefer a stable and comfort life to challengeable life.
>>> Unfortunately young people prefer a stable and comfortable life more than a challengeable life.
>>> Unfortunately young people prefer a stable and comfortable life more than a challenging life.

They don\'t try to learn hardly like handmade Korean traditional arts technic and industrial expertise.
>>>They don\'t try to learn hardly like handmade Korean traditional art technique and industrial expertise.

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