Many adults nowadays prefer spending their free time playing computer games. Why do they do this? Is
학생이 쓴 원문
Nowday, Many adults spending playing Computer games or Smart phone in their free time.
Because human life is changed (Analogue->Digital)
and then for example our country,
outdoor play ground is disappeared
Conclusion, I think this phenomenon is unavoidable.
강사 첨삭
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Nowday, Many adults spending playing Computer games or Smart phone in their free time.
>>> Nowadays, many adults play computer games or smart phone in their free time.
Because human life is changed (Analogue->Digital)
Because human life is changed (Analogue->Digital)
>>> Because human\'s lifestyle has changed (Analogue-Digital).
and then for example our country,
outdoor play ground is disappeared
outdoor play ground is disappeared
>>> For example our country\'s play ground has already disappeared.
Conclusion, I think this phenomenon is unavoidable.
Conclusion, I think this phenomenon is unavoidable.
>>> In conclusion, I think this phenomenon is unavoidable.
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