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In my opinion, there will be several problems to point out.

>> In my opinion, there are several problems to point out.

First of all, with an aging population, the country\'s power of competition with other countries will decrease more and more. 

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This is because, the country can develop by using workforces of the younger and middle-aged generation.

>> This is because the country can develop with the workforces of the younger and middle-aged generation.

Apart from that, it would be a big burden for youngsters when it comes to tax. 

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I mean, in order to take care of the elderly people, the government will impose lots of taxes on workers and it will have something to do with worker\'s qualities of their lives.

>> I mean, in order to take care of the elderly people, the government will impose lots of taxes on workers and it will have something to do with the workers\' quality of life.

Lastly, when there are more elderly people than young people, the society would be conservative to some extent. 

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That\'s why the society could not change flexibly so the younger generation will have a lot of responsibilities to live.

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