Many people put their personal information online (address, telephone number, and so on) for purpose

2021-08-12 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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I don\'t understand why most websites want users to put their personal information regardless of the type of business. I can provide it to a bank because it deals with money for customers so they need to identify customer\'s information every step. However, I don\'t think portal sites have to confirm user\'s ID when they want to join it because it\'s just search engine, there aren\'t potential harm to users and providers too. The government have implemented the different type of identification system due to the complexity of joining websites and inconvenience of installing various firewall programs. People have experienced to install those programs. Most of them spent a lot of time to install it and have been encountered difficulties because of many reasons like program problem itself, hardware and users\' skills. I know that privacy have to be first things whose company consider but they also are needed to care the user\'s convenience too. I think that it would be good to use smart phone.

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Hi there Mr. [이름]~! Happy Thursday! How are you doing? I hope you\'re doing  great. Well, I\'m hungry now... hahaha See you tomorrow!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I don\'t understand why most websites want users to put their personal information regardless of the type of business. 
>>> CORRECT
I can provide it to a bank because it deals with money for customers so they need to identify customer\'s information every step.
>>> I can provide it to the bank because it deals with money for customers so they need to identify the customer\'s information in every step.
 However, I don\'t think portal sites have to confirm user\'s ID when they want to join it because it\'s just search engine, there aren\'t potential harm to users and providers too. 
>>>  However, I don\'t think portal sites have to confirm user\'s ID when they want to join on it because it\'s just a search engine, there aren\'t potential harms to users and providers too. 
The government have implemented the different type of identification system due to the complexity of joining websites and inconvenience of installing various firewall programs. 
>>> The government has implemented the different types of identification systems due to the complexity of joining websites and inconveniency of installing various firewall programs. 
People have experienced to install those programs. 
>>> People have experienced installing those programs. 
Most of them spent a lot of time to install it and have been encountered difficulties because of many reasons like program problem itself, hardware and users\' skills.
>>> Most of them spent a lot of time to install it and had encountered difficulties because of many reasons like program problem itself, hardware and users\' skills.
 I know that privacy have to be first things whose company consider but they also are needed to care the user\'s convenience too.
>>>  I know that privacy had to be the first thing whose company consider but they\'re also needed to take care of the user\'s convenience too.
 I think that it would be good to use smart phone.
>>> I think it would be better to use smart phone.

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