Many people today do not feel safe either at home or when they are out. What are the causes? What ar
학생이 쓴 원문
There were uncountable crimes around us since human was born. I don\'t think there are more crime happened recently, because we don\'t know what kind of risks our ancestors had before. We only know the part of history because it\'s the way which we are aware of the events in the past. I think that it is strongly related with news what we saw. People don\'t like reading good events like someone\'s kindness or donation but we are interested in bad news such as robbery, rape and murder. It leads journalists to write more horrible accidents. In addition, politicians tends to make special events especially, during election campaign in order to make them more attractive or create issues that might be sensitive for people. After that, politicians pledge that they will solve these problems if they become president or law maker. Of course, there are a lot of social issues that lead unstable community. Unemployment and gap between rich and poor are the most serious concern we have encountered
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Hi there! I was surprised when you told me it was my last day to see you today. It saddened me but I didn\'t seem obvious hahaha. Anyway, have a great studies with another teacher and keep yourself humble while you improve yourself in English. You\'d surely be missed! Take care!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
There were uncountable crimes around us since human was born.
>>> CORRECT
I don\'t think there are more crime happened recently, because we don\'t know what kind of risks our ancestors had before.
>>> I don\'t think there are more crimes happening recently, because we don\'t know what kind of risks our ancestors had before.
We only know the part of history because it\'s the way which we are aware of the events in the past.
>>> We only know the part of history because it\'s the way which we can be informed about the events in the past.
I think that it is strongly related with news what we saw.
>>> I think that it is strongly related with what we see in the news .
People don\'t like reading good events like someone\'s kindness or donation but we are interested in bad news such as robbery, rape and murder.
>>> CORRECT
It leads journalists to write more horrible accidents.
>>> CORRECT
In addition, politicians tends to make special events especially, during election campaign in order to make them more attractive or create issues that might be sensitive for people.
>>> CORRECT
After that, politicians pledge that they will solve these problems if they become the president or law maker.
>>> CORRECT
Of course, there are a lot of social issues that lead to an unstable community.
>>> CORRECT
Unemployment and gap between rich and poor are the most serious concern we have encountered.
>>> CORRECT
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