Many working people get little or no exercise during the working day or in their free time, and have
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Secondly, there are lack of chances you have a team exercise. Being alone to do exercise is not easy. Because you might do not know how to do workout and it could be boring without exercise partners. Finally, there are many interesting things instead of exercise. I understand that exercise is not only for interest. However, we often heard from other people that exercise could be interesting and you would enjoy it. Unfortunately, we can find other exciting activities such as computer games, watching films instead of the physical activity.
On the other hand, there are many problem could be affected by this situation. So we need to find out solutions. Firstly, government should make some policies in order to limit employees’ overtime work. Because it is essential to keep their good work-life balance. Also communities should organize exercise programs and it could be a good way to attract people for encourage do exercise.
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Secondly, there are lack of chances you have a team exercise. Being alone to do exercise is not easy.
>>Secondly, there is lack of chances to have a team exercise. Being alone to do exercise is not easy.
Because you might do not know how to do workout and it could be boring without exercise partners. Finally, there are many interesting things instead of exercise.
>>Because you might not know how to workout and it could be boring without exercise partners. Finally, there are many interesting things instead of exercise.
I understand that exercise is not only for interest. However, we often heard from other people that exercise could be interesting and you would enjoy it.
>>Correct!
Unfortunately, we can find other exciting activities such as computer games, watching films instead of the physical activity.
>>Correct!
On the other hand, there are many problem could be affected by this situation. So we need to find out solutions.
>>On the other hand, there are many problems caused by this situation. So we need to find out solutions.파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.