Many working people get little or no exercise during the working day or in their free time, and have
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Lastly, we should inform how important exercise is for our physical well-being through a public advertisement.
In conclusion, I understand why many working people get little or no exercise although they have free time, but I believe that with the solutions we can help them to achieve their exercise and improve their health.
What is your job? I currently work for a company as an infirmary nurse.
- Where do you work? I work at a pharmaceutical company, it is located in central part of Seoul.
- Why did you choose that job? i love helping people and I feel rewarded for it. So I thought being a nurse could help many people.
- Is it a popular job in your country? Yes it is, nowadays it is hard to get a job . However, nurses can find jobs more easily than other professions. That’s why a nurse is a popular job.
- Do you like your job? I don’t like it. Because being a nurse is quite tough. Also, I had a hard time when i worked at the hospital especially in terms of shift work.
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Lastly, we should inform how important exercise is for our physical well-being through a public advertisement.
>> Correct!
In conclusion, I understand why many working people get little or no exercise although they have free time, but I believe that with the solutions we can help them to achieve their exercise and improve their health.
>> Correct!
I currently work for a company as an infirmary nurse.
>> Correct!
I work at a pharmaceutical company, it is located in central part of Seoul.
>>I work at a pharmaceutical company, it is located in the central part of Seoul.
i love helping people and I feel rewarded for it. So I thought being a nurse could help many people.
>> I love helping people and I feel rewarded for it. So, I thought being a nurse could help many people.
Yes it is, nowadays it is hard to get a job . However, nurses can find jobs more easily than other professions. That’s why a nurse is a popular job.
>>Yes, it is. Nowadays, it is hard to get a job . However, nurses can find jobs more easily than other professions. That’s why a nurse is a popular job.
I don’t like it. Because being a nurse is quite tough. Also, I had a hard time when i worked at the hospital especially in terms of shift work.
>>I don’t like it. Because being a nurse is quite tough. Also, I had a hard time when I worked at the hospital especially in terms of work shifts.
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