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Write your thoughts about the following topic. Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations?
Why? Why not?
-> I think that wealthy nations don't need to share their wealth among poorer nations.
In a small example, In Korea, people believe that can be wealthy only 40%.
In many cases, the wealthy become more wealthy, the poor frequently become poorer.
In this case, when wealthy nation share their wealth, poor nations harder.
so, I think that wealthy nations shouldn't share their wealth among poorer nations.
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I think that wealthy nations don\'t need to share their wealth among poorer nations.
>> CORRECT!In a small example, In Korea, people believe that can be wealthy only 40%.
>> To give you a little example, in Korea people believe that only 40% of the people can be wealthy.In many cases, the wealthy become more wealthy, the poor frequently become poorer.
>> In many cases, the wealthy becomes wealthier, while the poor becomes poorer.In this case, when wealthy nation share their wealth, poor nations harder.
>> In this case, when wealthy nations share their wealth, the poor nations will only have a harder time.so, I think that wealthy nations shouldn\'t share their wealth among poorer nations.
>> CORRECT!
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