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2016-07-07 · 첨삭 강사 Marie

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Write your thoughts about the following topic. Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations? Why? Why not? -> I think that wealthy nations don't need to share their wealth among poorer nations. In a small example, In Korea, people believe that can be wealthy only 40%. In many cases, the wealthy become more wealthy, the poor frequently become poorer. In this case, when wealthy nation share their wealth, poor nations harder. so, I think that wealthy nations shouldn't share their wealth among poorer nations.

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Hi there, [이름]! Welcome to the Power English composition page! Thank you for doing your homework. Great job here! Please review my corrections below. Keep up the good work! Ciao! ~Teacher Marie~ I think that wealthy nations don\'t need to share their wealth among poorer nations. >> CORRECT!In a small example, In Korea, people believe that can be wealthy only 40%. >> To give you a little example, in Korea people believe that only 40% of the people can be wealthy.In many cases, the wealthy become more wealthy, the poor frequently become poorer. >> In many cases, the wealthy becomes wealthier, while the poor becomes poorer.In this case, when wealthy nation share their wealth, poor nations harder. >> In this case, when wealthy nations share their wealth, the poor nations will only have a harder time.so, I think that wealthy nations shouldn\'t share their wealth among poorer nations. >> CORRECT!

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