Marketing myselft
학생이 쓴 원문
Dear [Name]. [Name]:
I have began to market myself as a personnel manager on a permanent part time basis to small firms (25-75 employes0 iin the greater metro area. I am open to any type of organization or industry, but I prefer professional firms in such field as : Law, Medicine, Engineering, Accounting, Financial Planning, Dentistry and Architecture. Should you be cognizant of any businuess associates, friends, or acquaintances who may be considering the need for a part time personnel manager, I would appreciate being provided with their names so that I may contact them personally. Any further assisstance or suggestions would also be greatly appreciated.
강사 첨삭
Hi Sophia!!^-^
Thank you for your composition. You are very diligent. Keep it up!
See you again in class nextweek. Enjoy your weekend!! ^-^
__Teacher Nica__
Dear [Name]. [Name]:I have began to market myself as a personnel manager on a permanent part time basis to small firms (25-75 employes0 iin the greater metro area.
>> I begun to market myself as a personal manager in a permanent part time basis in small firms (25-75 employyes) in greater metro area.
I am open to any type of organization or industry, but I prefer professional firms in such field as : Law, Medicine, Engineering, Accounting, Financial Planning, Dentistry and Architecture.
>> Correct!
Should you be cognizant of any businuess associates, friends, or acquaintances who may be considering the need for a part time personnel manager, I would appreciate being provided with their names so that I may contact them personally.
>> Correct!
Any further assisstance or suggestions would also be greatly appreciated.
>> Correct!
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