Marriage and women.

2020-04-27 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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In most patriarchal societies, it is undeniable that marriage poses an infringement on women\'s liberty to some extent. In fact, the life of a female in a male-dominated society is somehow more restricted in virtually every aspect than that of a male, only being exacerbated by getting married. It seems that the duties involved in having a permanent housemate, coupled with the matter of reproduction, are disproportionately distributed to both sexes in general. Though there are few exceptional cases where a male partner is frequently praised of doing what they should do, while the female counterpart is forced to feel gratitude of it, which is absolutely nonsense. In this respect, it is noteworthy that there are a couple of alternative types of marriage such as living apart together, meaning we should open up our imagination further. By doing so, we will be able to figure out what is the best way of maintaing a sound relationship between partners along with the empowerment of women.

강사 첨삭

WOW! Excellent homework Drexel! Thank you for sharing your views on this one. I really appreciate it!  ^^
-Teacher Jedah

In most patriarchal societies, it is undeniable that marriage poses an infringement on women\'s liberty to some extent. 
>>CORRECT
In fact, the life of a female in a male-dominated society is somehow more restricted in virtually every aspect than that of a male, only being exacerbated by getting married. 
>>CORRECT
It seems that the duties involved in having a permanent housemate, coupled with the matter of reproduction, are disproportionately distributed to both sexes in general. 
>>CORRECT
Though there are few exceptional cases where a male partner is frequently praised of doing what they should do, while the female counterpart is forced to feel gratitude of it, which is absolutely nonsense.
>>CORRECT
In this respect, it is noteworthy that there are a couple of alternative types of marriage such as living apart together, meaning we should open up our imagination further. 
>>CORRECT
By doing so, we will be able to figure out what is the best way of maintaing a sound relationship between partners along with the empowerment of women.
>>CORRECT (*maintaining)

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