Mass shooting in US
학생이 쓴 원문
Today, I would like to talk about the horrible mass shooting that killed more 50 people in Orlando.
First of all, I can not understand Gun politics in U.S.
I know that this matter is a controversial issue in America. This issue is strongly related in the presidential campaign
It seems to be impossible to control all guns in U.S. like Korea
But The new I watched said that an automatic rifle that is similar to M-16 was used in the mass shooting in Orando.
When I heard that new, I was surprised about that kind of Gun is allowed in U.S.
I used that Gun when I was in military service.
When I was soldier, My main task was the maintenance of Guns for reserve force.
M-16 was the main firearms for the reserve force in Korea and it is still using.
강사 첨삭
Hello there Mr. [Name].
Thank you very much for sharing your opinion regarding this horrible incident.
It\'s really sad how people could be so reckless.
I feel sorry for all of the people who got hurt and died.
The people who died in that shooting spree didn\'t deserve to die that way.
How could the U.S. government overlook such a thing?
Allowing their citizens to own a gun is a very bad idea and they should have known better.
Legally owning a gun does not give a person the right to shoot others and take lives.
I think the U.S. government should closely look into this and give immediate action.
This is a really sad news.
Anyhow, I hope you\'re okay and you\'re having a great day.
See you again tomorrow. Take care.
~Teacher Charry
Today, I would like to talk about the horrible mass shooting that killed more 50 people in Orlando.
>> Today, I would like to talk about the horrible mass shooting that killed more than 50 people in Orlando.
First of all, I can not understand Gun politics in U.S.
>> First of all, I cannot understand the gun politics in the U.S.
I know that this matter is a controversial issue in America.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I know that this matter is a very big issue in America.
This issue is strongly related in the presidential campaign>> This issue is strongly related to the presidential campaign.It seems to be impossible to control all guns in U.S. like Korea
>> It seems to be impossible to control all guns in the U.S. just like in Korea. But The new I watched said that an automatic rifle that is similar to M-16 was used in the mass shooting in Orando.
>> But the news that I watched said that an automatic rifle that is similar to an M-16 was used in the mass shooting in Orlando.When I heard that new, I was surprised about that kind of Gun is allowed in U.S.
>> When I heard that news, I was surprised to know that, that kind of Gun is allowed in the U.S.I used that Gun when I was in military service.
>> CORRECT!
>> I used that gun when I was serving in the military. When I was soldier, My main task was the maintenance of Guns for reserve force.
>> When I was a soldier, my main task was to maintain the guns for the reserve force.M-16 was the main firearms for the reserve force in Korea and it is still using.
>> M-16 guns are the main firearms for the reserve force in Korea.
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