May 28 Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
ESSAY: Nowadays a few people take their family with them abroad whenever they go on a business trip. What are the advantages and disadvantages for them and for their family?
I think that short term business trip is not O.K, long term business trip for months or years is O.K. Because business trip for short term is very busy, it can’t go somewhere as like a famous place of visiting country with family. In case of business trip for long term, it can have free time on weekends, it can visit a famous place of visiting country with family. But surely, all of expense to trip with family must be paid by itself and it must only work during working hours(8 hours per day).
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think that short term business trip is not O.K, long term business trip for months or years is O.K.
>>> I think short term business trip is not okay, long term business trip for months or years is better.
Because business trip for short term is very busy, it can’t go somewhere as like a famous place of visiting country with family.
>>> Because short term business trip is very busy, you can’t go somewhere like in famous places or tourist spots with your family.
In case of business trip for long term, it can have free time on weekends, it can visit a famous place of visiting country with family.
>>> In case of long term business trips, you can have free time on weekends, you can also visit famous places with your family.
But surely, all of expense to trip with family must be paid by itself and it must only work during working hours(8 hours per day).
>>> But surely, all expenses for trips with the family must be paid by yourself and you must only work during working hours(8 hours per day).
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