May 8th\'s homework
학생이 쓴 원문
I want to keep a clean room so that i can put only the things i need. And it could be secure some space where i can do the stretching or working out in my room.
For my freetime I want to set a TV facing with my bed. I used to watching Youtube or Netflix using pad on my bed and i feel uncomfortable lying down or sitting down. But if I had a TV in my room, i would have been able to spent my free time comfortably.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름] [이름],
For my freetime I want to set a TV facing with my bed.
Thanks for sharing your ideas about how you want your room to look like. I agree, I think having a TV would be very convenient. ^^
-Teacher Ash
I want to keep a clean room so that i can put only the things i need.
>> I want to keep a clean room so that I can only put the things I need.
And it could be secure some space where i can do the stretching or working out in my room.
>> It will also create a space for me to stretch and work out.
For my freetime I want to set a TV facing with my bed.
>> For my free time, I want to set a TV facing my bed.
I used to watching Youtube or Netflix using pad on my bed and i feel uncomfortable lying down or sitting down.
>>I used to watch YouTube or Netflix on my iPad while lying or sitting on my bed and it felt uncomfortable.
But if I had a TV in my room, i would have been able to spent my free time comfortably.
>> So, if I have a TV in my room, I would be able to watch comfortably.
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