May 9
학생이 쓴 원문
I\'d like to watch movies in my extra time because, I am fond of it. By doing this, I can experience other lives, become an another person and worlds. Apart from that, I could exercise and do outdoor activities such as shopping. However, personally, never sleeping is very horrible to me.
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Hello, [이름]! ^^,)
I agree with you. Sleep is definitely necessary for humans to function well.
Your health, happiness, and cognitive function all improve with adequate sleep. Lack of regular, good-quality sleep increases the chance of developing a variety of illnesses and disorders.
Enjoy the rest of your day. Practice English whenever you can!
__T. Mayleen :)
I\'d like to watch movies in my extra time because, I am fond of it.
>>> I\'d like to watch movies in my spare time because I am fond of them.
By doing this, I can experience other lives, become an another person and worlds.
>>> By doing this, I can experience other lives and other worlds.
Apart from that, I could exercise and do outdoor activities such as shopping.
>>> CORRECT
However, personally, never sleeping is very horrible to me.
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: However, I find it to be very dreadful to never sleep.
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