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1.I have never witnessed serious violence directly. 2.I have witnessed it in the media such as TV, the movies. 3.Fortunately, I have never been involved in that incident. 4.It seems a social problem, and primary responsibilities reside in this society. 5.Students are easy to be influenced by the media like the dramas, the comics and a lot of things. 6.And such things cover the violent story and scene frequently. 7.Students are getting more violent if the media goes on covering the violent things. 8.To suppress with a power isn't a real win.It's stupid. 9.I'll teach this fact.But I don't have a specific way yet. 10.The students are easy to be inflenced by the media.And the childish and immature adults also may be so. 11.For whom is the violent video games? 12.What is the benefit of the violent video games? 13.It only offers a momentary pleasure to us. 14.It never seems to have the positive points. 15.So the violent video games should be banned.

Hi Ms. [이름]! Thanks for making such wonderful sentences. Well done! Review some of your sentences here, I checked them for you. Have a great Monay! Enjoy! CIAO! ~Teacher Marie~ 1.I have never witnessed serious violence directly. >> CORRECT2.I have witnessed it in the media such as TV, the movies. >> CORRECT OR >> I only witnessed it in the media, such as in the television or in the movies. 3.Fortunately, I have never been involved in that incident. >> CORRECT OR >> Fortunately, I have never been involved in such incidents.4.It seems a social problem, and primary responsibilities reside in this society. >> It seems like a social problem and I think the primary responsibility lies in this society.5.Students are easy to be influenced by the media like the dramas, the comics and a lot of things. >> Students are easily influenced by the media like dramas on TV, comic books, etc.6.And such things cover the violent story and scene frequently. >> Such media outlet covers violent stories and scenes frequently.7.Students are getting more violent if the media goes on covering the violent things. >> CORRECT OR >> Students will get more violent if the media goes on covering these violent things.8.To suppress with a power isn\'t a real win.It\'s stupid. >> To suppress with power isn\'t real victory. It\'s stupid.9.I\'ll teach this fact.But I don\'t have a specific way yet. >> I\'ll teach this fact but I don\'t have a specific way yet.10.The students are easy to be inflenced by the media.And the childish and immature adults also may be so.>> Students are easily influenced by the media. And so are the childish and immature adults. 11.For whom is the violent video games? >> CORRECT OR >> For whom are these violent video games?12.What is the benefit of the violent video games? >> CORRECT OR >> What are the benefits of violent video games?13.It only offers a momentary pleasure to us. >> CORRECT *Great sentence!14.It never seems to have the positive points. >> it doesn\'t seem to have any positive side to it.15.So the violent video games should be banned. >> CORRECT OR >> So violent video games should be banned.