May I introduce myself?
학생이 쓴 원문
May I introduce myself ? Nice to meet you.
My name is [Name] Kim, and I am 55 year old. I live with my wife and 28-year-old younger son.
He finished a military service at june this year, he is a health trainer. He likes his job so much.
My elder son got married at April this year and lives at Busan.
I retired from keb hanabank at end of July. I had been worked for 30 years at that bank.
I started learning computer and cooking lesson last month after I retired my former workplace
I want to commuinicate with many people by SNS and teach a Korean traditional food to foreigner.
Because I like it for now, but what I really want to do is work abroad as KOICA members.
I am also learning Korean language teaching lecture. Because I want to teach Korean language for foreigner when I have a chance to teach it.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]!
It was really a pleasure to talk to you for the first time today! You were very enthusiastic and very fluent when speaking. Thank you for once again making another composition. You made very minor mistakes so I hope you continue writing so you can practice. ^^
~~Teacher Kate
>>CORRECT!
2. My name is [Name] Kim, and I am 55 year old. I live with my wife and 28-year-old younger son.
2. My name is [Name] Kim, and I am 55 year old. I live with my wife and 28-year-old younger son.
>>My name is [Name] Kim, and I am 55 years old. I live with my wife and 28-year-old younger son.
3. He finished a military service at june this year, he is a health trainer. He likes his job so much.
3. He finished a military service at june this year, he is a health trainer. He likes his job so much.
>>He finished a military service in June this year. He is a health trainer. He likes his job so much.
4. My elder son got married at April this year and lives at Busan.
4. My elder son got married at April this year and lives at Busan.
>>My elder son got married in April this year and lives in Busan.
5. I retired from keb hanabank at end of July. I had been worked for 30 years at that bank.
5. I retired from keb hanabank at end of July. I had been worked for 30 years at that bank.
>> I retired from Keb Hana bank at the end of July. I had been working at that bank for 30 years.
6. I started learning computer and cooking lesson last month after I retired my former workplace
>>I started learning how to use the computer and took cooking lessons last month after I retired from my former workplace
7. I want to commuinicate with many people by SNS and teach a Korean traditional food to foreigner.
7. I want to commuinicate with many people by SNS and teach a Korean traditional food to foreigner.
>> I want to communicate with many people via SNS and teach a foreigner about a Korean traditional food.
8. Because I like it for now, but what I really want to do is work abroad as KOICA members.
8. Because I like it for now, but what I really want to do is work abroad as KOICA members.
>>I like doing these for now but what I really want to do is work abroad as one of the KOICA members.
9. I am also learning Korean language teaching lecture.
9. I am also learning Korean language teaching lecture.
>>I\'m also watching a lecture on Korean language teaching.
10. Because I want to teach Korean language for foreigner when I have a chance to teach it.
>>It is because I want to teach the Korean language to foreigners when I have a chance to teach it.
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