May i request to correct my writing?

1.I have no sisters. 2.Person who have a soft spot for temptation is easy to fall into shell game. 3.Pouring it on must be a sly purpose. 4.My families live in Daegu, but I live in Seoul.So I'm unfettered. 5.When I'm in pain, I pour out my soul before God. 6.I hate a bird's everything. I hate all about a bird. 7.A bire suddenly fly to me and shock to me. 8.Even if one person think they are just friend,another person may not think so. 9.It was generally sunny, but it was rainy for a while. 10.I should become a cognoscente of Pharmacy. 11.I heard the sound,pow!,that the flowerpot fell down from the shelf. 12.Yesterday I worked in the pharmacy where I had worked 2 years ago. 13.I think, it is the recidivism that you are absent the class. 14.Sorry, I need to powder my nose. 15.There are various kinds of roses. 16.Everybody have a cell phone even a children. 17.I encounter the rival who I have avoided meeting. 18.I'm looking for a appropriate restaurant to treat my uncle to dinner. 19.MY brother and I were fighting over an icecream when my mom came back home. 20.Some friends of mine are coming to my house tomorrow. 21.I want to have a speech power to burn like AnChulsu. 22.The increased liquor price cannot seem to change to the liquor consumption habits. 23.She isn't an alcolholic,because she can control to drink. 24.I will make a law to restrict a day's purchase quantity and a month's one. 25.3 ways to beat the heat this summer : - To drink an ice-cold juice during a shower. - To expose oneself to the wind immediately after a shower. - Lay oneself down motionlessly. 26.Don't enforce your rule on me. 27.A plan is important,but an implementation is more important.

Hi Ms. [이름]! Thanks for sending in your composition. I checked your sentences here, please review them carefully. Talk to you tomorrow! CIAO! ~Teacher Marie~ 1.I have no sisters. >> CORRECT2.Person who have a soft spot for temptation is easy to fall into shell game. >> A person who has a soft spot for temptation can easily fall into a shell game.3.Pouring it on must be a sly purpose. >> Pouring it on must have a sly purpose.4.My families live in Daegu, but I live in Seoul.So I\'m unfettered. >> My family lives in Daegu, but I live in Seoul. So I\'m liberated. **Unfettered means \'released from physical or mental bonds; unrestrained\', and in some way it means \'liberate\' but I think it\'s not right to use this word in this context. ^^5.When I\'m in pain, I pour out my soul before God. >> CORRECT6.I hate a bird\'s everything. I hate all about a bird. >> I hate everything about birds. I hate all kinds of birds.7.A bire suddenly fly to me and shock to me. >> A bird suddenly flew towards me and shocked me.8.Even if one person think they are just friend,another person may not think so. >> Even if one person thinks they are just friends, the other one might not think so.9.It was generally sunny, but it was rainy for a while. >> CORRECT10.I should become a cognoscente of Pharmacy. >> CORRECT11.I heard the sound,pow!,that the flowerpot fell down from the shelf. >> I heard a loud pow when the flower pot fell off from the shelf.12.Yesterday I worked in the pharmacy where I had worked 2 years ago. >> Yesterday, I worked at the pharmacy where I had worked two years ago.13.I think, it is the recidivism that you are absent the class. >> Recidivism means \'repeated or habitual relapse, as into crime\' so I don\'t think you can use it in this context. Here\'s an example sentence: Study after study shows, the higher the level of education the lower the recidivism rate. 14.Sorry, I need to powder my nose. >> CORRECT15.There are various kinds of roses. >> CORRECT16.Everybody have a cell phone even a children. >> Everybody has a cell phone, even children.  17.I encounter the rival who I have avoided meeting. >> I encountered my rival, whom I have been avoiding.18.I\'m looking for a appropriate restaurant to treat my uncle to dinner. >> I\'m looking for an appropriate restaurant to treat my uncle to dinner.19. MY brother and I were fighting over an icecream when my mom came back home. >> CORRECT *icecream - ice cream20.Some friends of mine are coming to my house tomorrow. >> CORRECT21.I want to have a speech power to burn like AnChulsu. >> CORRECT22.The increased liquor price cannot seem to change to the liquor consumption habits. >> The increased liquor price wouldn\'t change the liquor consumption habits.23.She isn\'t an alcolholic,because she can control to drink. >> She isn\'t an alcoholic because she can control her drinking habits.24.I will make a law to restrict a day\'s purchase quantity and a month\'s one. >> I will make a law to restrict the purchase quantity, both daily and monthly.25.3 ways to beat the heat this summer : >> CORRECT- To drink an ice-cold juice during a shower. >> To drink an ice cold juice before/after a shower.- To expose oneself to the wind immediately after a shower. >> CORRECT- Lay oneself down motionlessly. >> CORRECT OR >> Lie down and do not move.26.Don\'t enforce your rule on me. >> CORRECT27.A plan is important, but an implementation is more important. >> CORRECT OR >> Although a plan is important, implementation is much more essential.