Maybe....June?
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I think the last time I went to the beach was on my birthday. My birthday is on June 19th. At that time, I went to a seafood restaurant and ate a lot of delicious things such as grilled clams, lobster, noodles, shrimp, and seaweed. As for the cake, I ate my favorite chocolate cake, and I still vividly remember the texture because it has a lot of chocolate cream inside! After we finished, we took pictures at the beach and had a lot of fun! When I grow up, there will be not a lot of birthday parties I can spend freely because of the many exams, but I think I spent it with no regrets because I had a happy birthday party at a young age like me!
강사 첨삭
Hello, Maria! ^^,)
Thank you for this composition. I\'ve read it well. I am glad to know that you had a great time on your birthday last June.
I\'ve made some modifications for you to review later on.
See you on our next class.^^ Good night!
__T. Mayleen :)
I think the last time I went to the beach was on my birthday.
>>> CORRECT
My birthday is on June 19th.
>>> CORRECT
At that time, I went to a seafood restaurant and ate a lot of delicious things such as grilled clams, lobster, noodles, shrimp, and seaweed.
>>> CORRECT
As for the cake, I ate my favorite chocolate cake, and I still vividly remember the texture because it has a lot of chocolate cream inside!
>>> As for the cake, I ate my favorite chocolate cake, and I still vividly remember the texture because it had a lot of chocolate cream inside!
RE: HAS TO HAD (PAST TENSE)
After we finished, we took pictures at the beach and had a lot of fun!
>>> CORRECT
When I grow up, there will be not a lot of birthday parties I can spend freely because of the many exams, but I think I spent it with no regrets because I had a happy birthday party at a young age like me!
>>> When I grow up, there won\'t be a lot of birthday parties I enjoy because of the many exams, but I think I spent my previous birthdays with no regrets because I had a parties at a young age just like last time!
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