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<Media>-Essay (2014.02.22)
Do you watch 2014 winter olympics in Sochi these days? Every person who lives in this world is interested in it and also wants to go Sochi to see the olympic games in real. But, people of all around the world can't go Sochi to see winter olympic, because the olympic stadiums have limit of sitting capacity. Then the rest of people who couldn't go there are impossible to watch the olympic games? The answer is no. We can watch it on television, because television is a sort of media.
If so, what is media? And what are their sorts and roles? When we say media, most of people think about television. But there are many sorts of media not only television but also internet(news), social network site such as naver, youtube, google, facebook, kakaotalk, newspaper, radio, twitter and so on. Then what is the criterion of media? Naver encyclopedia defines that media is a one of tools to deliver any ideas or the truths as mediums and methods. And also it define the media that is a vehicle to deliver affairs and effects. SNS such as facebook, kakaotalk, twitter are thought also the media, because the user of those, us are informational beings. Like those, if we look at our daily life, we could find our figure that gain many affairs opening in all around the world right away through various media.
But there are some problems of some medias. first, the part of television, one of the medias doesn't put out only the news of information. It also puts out various program for entertaining to information recipients. It's good to entertain people, but it loses the most important thing more and more. All of media's the most important role is offer the truth information to people. But these days, it puts out lots of entertaining program more than news that gives us information. And also, it puts out gimmicky news such as idol star's scandals to cover up very important social issues and affairs like a corruption scandals implicating incumbent lawmakers. Do you remember the strike of MBC? The reason of it is blocking to put out MBC reporter's news-gathering. MBC reporters want to put their report without any conditions, but MBC's high-ranking officers against their ask, and order not to put out government's bad affairs. Because, they are too pro-government and lopsided. News should put out the truth of everything, it shouldn't has any private feeling and thinking. Or not, it becomes chirashi which has specific private feeling and thinking. More famous and public broadcasting companies such as MBC should be qualified the supreme fairness and ethicality like BBC and CNN, because it is the public TV.
And also the media of Hangyeorye newspaper has problem. It reports many social affairs and issues with too lopsided opinions about social issues. In the way that MBC and Hangyeorye newspapaer are public media, it has to put out the facts without any private feeling and thinking. It violated one of the media's important roles.
I think media can spread some affairs or issues to many people all around the world, so media has to have responsibility to bring us the truth with no lopsided ways. To bring various information, it should be certain, only tell the truth and don't report on lopsided ways. If it doesn't report based on these things that reporters need to be aware of, it can occur mass and misunderstanding to recipients like us. Media have to be faithful with their original important roles, because, we have the right to know the fact of affairs in all around the world.
강사 첨삭
Hello Sandra!
Whew! This a long one kkkk
But I appreciate your effort in providing your opinion regarding the matter.
I agree with what you said.
The media should be very responsible to avoid misunderstanding.
See you in class dear :)
~Teacher Becca~
Here are some corrections:
Do you watch 2014 winter olympics in Sochi these days?
>> Did you watch the 2014 Winter Olympics in Sochi these days?
Every person who lives in this world is interested in it and also wants to go Sochi to see the olympic games in real.
>> Everyone in the world is interested in it, and they even want to go to Sochi to watch the olympic games live.
But, people of all around the world can\'t go Sochi to see winter olympic, because the olympic stadiums have limit of sitting capacity.
>> But unfortunately, the people from different parts of the world can\'t watch the Winter Olympics in Sochi due to a limited sitting capacity.
Then the rest of people who couldn\'t go there are impossible to watch the olympic games?
>> Does this make it impossible for people to watch the Winter Olympics?
The answer is no.
>> correct :)
>> OR: Of course not.
We can watch it on television, because television is a sort of media.
>> We can watch it on television, since the media will be televising the games.If so, what is media?
>> correct :)
>> OR: If that\'s the case, then how can we define \"media\"?
And what are their sorts and roles?
>> correct :)
When we say media, most of people think about television.
>> When we say media, most people think that it only exist through television.
But there are many sorts of media not only television but also internet(news), social network site such as naver, youtube, google, facebook, kakaotalk, newspaper, radio, twitter and so on.
>> But there are many sorts of media, not only through television, but also from the internet (mostly news), social networking sites such as Naver, YouTube, Facebook,Twitter, and KakaoTalk; from search engines like Google and Yahoo!; and of course, from newspapers and radio programs.
Then what is the criterion of media?
>> correct :)
>> OR: What is media\'s criteria?
Naver encyclopedia defines that media is a one of tools to deliver any ideas or the truths as mediums and methods.
>> Naver encyclopedia defines media as one of the tools to deliver ideas, truths, mediums, and methods.
And also it define the media that is a vehicle to deliver affairs and effects.
>> In addition, it also mentioned that the media is a vehicle to deliver affairs and effects.
SNS such as facebook, kakaotalk, twitter are thought also the media, because the user of those, us are informational beings.
>> SNS such as Facebook, KakaoTalk, and Twitter were also considered as media, because its users gain information from them.
Like those, if we look at our daily life, we could find our figure that gain many affairs opening in all around the world right away through various media.
>> Through the mentioned social media, we can be informed of various knowledge that we can relate to our daily life. But there are some problems of some medias.
>> But there are some problems in media.
>> But there are some things that I consider as a problem in media.
first, the part of television, one of the medias doesn\'t put out only the news of information.
>> First of all, not all the information imparted by the media are useful.
It also puts out various program for entertaining to information recipients.
>> They also introduce various entertainment programs.
It\'s good to entertain people, but it loses the most important thing more and more.
>> The value of entertainment is good, but more important information is lost.
All of media\'s the most important role is offer the truth information to people.
>> Media\'s most important role is to provide authentic information to people.
But these days, it puts out lots of entertaining program more than news that gives us information.
>> But during these days, there are more entertainment programs than news -- which gives us more important and necessary information.
And also, it puts out gimmicky news such as idol star\'s scandals to cover up very important social issues and affairs like a corruption scandals implicating incumbent lawmakers.
>> It also puts out irrelevant celebrity news and scandals to cover up the crucial social issues that people has to know, such as corruption issues related to incumbent lawmakers.
Do you remember the strike of MBC?
>> correct :)
>> OR: Do you recall MBC strike?
The reason of it is blocking to put out MBC reporter\'s news-gathering.
>> The said strike was due to restraining an MBC reporter\'s news report.
MBC reporters want to put their report without any conditions, but MBC\'s high-ranking officers against their ask, and order not to put out government\'s bad affairs.
>> MBC reporters want to release their report to the public, but their high-ranking officers were against their decision. They ordered the reporters not to release the news report about the bad government affairs.
Because, they are too pro-government and lopsided. >> Because they are pro-government and I think that they are lopsided.
News should put out the truth of everything, it shouldn\'t has any private feeling and thinking.
>> The news should always make sure that every information that they relay to the public is true. It shouldn\'t be influenced by personal desires and thoughts.
Or not, it becomes chirashi which has specific private feeling and thinking. >> Or else it will be just like \"chirashi\", which shows a specific feeling or thought.
More famous and public broadcasting companies such as MBC should be qualified the supreme fairness and ethicality like BBC and CNN, because it is the public TV.
>> Famous public broadcasting companies such as MBC should follow BBC and CNN in terms of being fair and ethical. And also the media of Hangyeorye newspaper has problem.
>> The media of Hangyeorye newspaper has a problem as well.
It reports many social affairs and issues with too lopsided opinions about social issues.
>> correct :)
>> OR: It reports many social issues and affairs, but with lopsided opinions about the issues.
In the way that MBC and Hangyeorye newspapaer are public media, it has to put out the facts without any private feeling and thinking.
>> Because MBC and Hangyeorye newspaper are considered as public media, it should contain facts only.
It violated one of the media\'s important roles.
>> correct :)I think media can spread some affairs or issues to many people all around the world, so media has to have responsibility to bring us the truth with no lopsided ways.
>> Media is responsible of providing news and current affairs, so all information they impart to people should be truthful.
To bring various information, it should be certain, only tell the truth and don\'t report on lopsided ways.
>> Truth should be observed in providing all kinds of information.
If it doesn\'t report based on these things that reporters need to be aware of, it can occur mass and misunderstanding to recipients like us.
>> If the reports has discrepancies, it can cause a huge misunderstanding.
Media have to be faithful with their original important roles, because, we have the right to know the fact of affairs in all around the world.
>> The media should stick to their duties and responsibilies, because we have the right to know what is going on in our world today.
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