Media
학생이 쓴 원문
When I was young, media refer to TV, radio and newspaper. Nowadays, we are contacting with media through the internet, smart phone as well as TV in our everyday lives. We cannot imagine our lives without media. Media are very influencial to our lives but we have to be very careful which news we are exposed to. The people concerned to media tend to write the article in exciting and negative ways because they want to pay attention to readers or viewers. So we have to judge the news rationally. Recently we've heard the warm-hearted news about the sportmen who take part in the Olympic Games. They could win the medals through taking pains and efforts. Sadly, media only focus in the medalist. We cannot hear the news about many athelets who tried their best but could not get good results. If the media deal with their sad and worthwhile stories, I think that it gives more cheer and encouragement to many ordinary people who are living under the hard situation.
강사 첨삭
Media has a way of brainwashing people. If we are not smart enough to filter the information we get around us, then we will be easily influenced. Media has the tendency to be biased. Honest journalism nowadays doesn\'t pay well. Everything has to be exaggerated and only all the needless unimportant news are the ones trending all the time. I\'m not worried about you because you are a smart woman who is always aware of what\'s going on around you. Thanks for your sharing this information. Take care!
T. Lara
When I was young, media refer to TV, radio and newspaper.
>>When I was young, media refers to TV, radio and newspaper.
Nowadays, we are contacting with media through the internet, smart phone as well as TV in our everyday lives.
>>Nowadays, we use media like the internet, smart phones as well as TV in our everyday lives.
We cannot imagine our lives without media.
>>Correct!
Media are very influencial to our lives but we have to be very careful which news we are exposed to.
>>Correct!
The people concerned to media tend to write the article in exciting and negative ways because they want to pay attention to readers or viewers.
>>The people concerned with media tend to write articles in exciting and negative ways because they want to draw attention from readers or viewers.
So we have to judge the news rationally.
>>Correct!
Recently we\'ve heard the warm-hearted news about the sportmen who take part in the Olympic Games.
>>Recently, we\'ve heard the warm-hearted news about the sportmen who took part in the Olympic Games.
They could win the medals through taking pains and efforts.
>>They were able to win medals through pain and efforts.
Sadly, media only focus in the medalist.
>>Sadly, the media focused only on the medalists.
We cannot hear the news about many athelets who tried their best but could not get good results.
>>Correct!
If the media deal with their sad and worthwhile stories, I think that it gives more cheer and encouragement to many ordinary people who are living under the hard situation.
>> If the media dealt with their sad and worthwhile stories, I think that it would have given more cheer and encouragement to many ordinary people who are living under hard situations.
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