Media censoring.

2020-04-10 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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Censoring media is a contentious issue which is currently being debated throughout the world. It involves two contrary ideas, one of which is the freedom of speech and another of which is the matter of fake news. On the one hand, a journalist should be able to carry out investigations freely if needed and to release reports about them without any interference from a third party. By doing so, a society\'s overall transparency is improved, which facilitates trust among citizens. In this respect, media censorship must be strictly restricted so that the freedom of speech could be fully guaranteed. Nevertheless, especially on the Internet, fake news is gaining popularity at an alarming speed. Misinformation feeds on uncertainty and outrageous curiosity, leaving people with fear or delusion. If this develops further, then the majority of population is likely to be victimized as it doesn\'t discriminate where, what, or whom to attack. So, government officials should always be keen to the issue.

강사 첨삭

Hi Drexel! Wow! No questions! This is one good composition. Thanks a lot! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah

Censoring media is a contentious issue which is currently being debated throughout the world. 
>>CORRECT
It involves two contrary ideas, one of which is the freedom of speech and another of which is the matter of fake news. 
>>CORRECT
On the one hand, a journalist should be able to carry out investigations freely if needed and to release reports about them without any interference from a third party. 
>>CORRECT (add biases)
By doing so, a society\'s overall transparency is improved, which facilitates trust among citizens. 
>>CORRECT
In this respect, media censorship must be strictly restricted so that the freedom of speech could be fully guaranteed. 
>>CORRECT
Nevertheless, especially on the Internet, fake news is gaining popularity at an alarming speed. 
>>CORRECT
Misinformation feeds on uncertainty and outrageous curiosity, leaving people with fear or delusion. 
>>CORRECT
If this develops further, then the majority of population is likely to be victimized as it doesn\'t discriminate where, what, or whom to attack. 
>>CORRECT
So, government officials should always be keen to the issue.
>>CORRECT

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