Media is influential.
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강사 첨삭
Hello there my dear [이름]^^
Where are you now? Still at the library?
So far this is the longest composition you\'ve ever done..kk
Good job! You expressed your thoughts well here.
Media is everywhere so we have to be responsible.
We should know the how to use it and be influenced by it.
I am so happy to know that you know your role as a user of media.
For me as influenced by the media, I want to be a catalyst for change
so I will be responsible on this.
Thanks for your time my dear^^
Have a good evening and eat your dinner well.
See you~
Teacher Liza
Expound on this: Media is influential.
Media is our colored spectacles.
>>Correct
>> OR: Media is a colored spectacles.
When the broadcast shows as a black color, we see that as that color.
>> When they broadcast shows as in \"black color\" we see it as colored.
There are three reasons that the media is influential.
>> Correct
>> OR: There are three reasons why the media is influential.
First, the developement of science.
>> Correct (spelling check: development)
>> OR: First is because of the modern technology.
We can encounter the news whereever , whenever we want them.
>> We can encounter news where ever or when eve we want them.
>> OR: We can know the news where ever or when ever we need them.
Through smart phones, We can easily access to them.
>> Through smart phones we can easily access them.
So people are getting to know the news directly and fastly.
>>Correct
>> OR: So people get to know the news directly and fastly.
Second, Media is very easy to access for everyone.
>> Second, media is very easy to access for everyone.
>> OR: Second, media is very easy to access by anyone.
No one can\'t be allowed to know that news through internet, newspapers, or television even for the infants.
>> No one is not allowed to know the news from the Internet, newspapers or television regardless of age.
Lastly, Media is the easiest way to recognize the social fleunt.
>>Lastly, media is the easiest source for us to recognize the happenings in the society.
>> OR: Lastly, media is the easiest way for us to know what are happening in our society.
We are not political members like chairman.
So we don\'t know the fact.
>> We are not political members like a mayor or councilors so we don\'t know the facts.
>> OR: We are not politicians so we don\'t know the real thing.
Thus the reports are there for us.
>> Correct
>> OR: Thus the media is there for us to know them.
According to the view of each reports, our views to the social and political events will also be decided.
>>According to the point of view of each report, our own views to the political events still will be decided upon us.
>> OR: From the reports they show to us, it still depends to us on how are we going to view that reports.
One the other hand, The Media can be exploited by money or honor.
>>On the other hand, media can be exploited by money or honor.
So there are likely to be the false on the news.
>> So there are instances that the news are inaccurate.
On that side We\'ve got to see the news objectively and precisely.
>> In that case, we\'ve got to see the news objectively and precisely.
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