Medical develop is very important to life.

2023-02-01 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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Medical develop is very important to life. Because medical(medicine) make increase life and life energy. Theseday if get a cancer we dont die. Cause medical tech. So medical tech will develop more I think we can live 150years for future. and i hope so

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>>> TEACHER GEMMA

Medical develop is very important to life.

>>> Medical development is very important to our lives.
Because medical(medicine) make increase life and life energy.

>>> Because medicines can increase our life span and life energy.

Theseday if get a cancer we dont die.

>>> These days, if a person has a cancer he could be treated.
Cause medical tech.

>>> Because of medical technology.
So medical tech will develop more

>>> CORRECT!
I think we can live 150 years for future.

>>> I think we can live for 150 years in the future.
and i hope so

OR>>> And I hope so.

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