Meeting new people
학생이 쓴 원문
When I was young, meeting new people and make friends was very easy and natural without any effort. \'Just going to school\' was enough to meet and make friends. But after I graduated university and started my career, meeting new people was not the same things as I was a student.
Most of the cases meeting new people were related to my job. I met many people but never made friends from it. If I finished my job, many people who I\'ve known would be separated from me. I get older,I think meeting new people is like a little chance passed by me. It could be a chance to make friends or not. But talking to new people usually opens another world from mine. It is exciting even though they wouldn\'t be my friends. Otherwise we often listen to the news about criminals in modern societies, there were so many scams, so many bad person. Is meeting new people dangerous? Where are the safe guides for it? I think we need to believe that most people are good person like me. It\'s the key for safe meeting.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
Thank you for your essay. I really liked your reflection about meeting new people and how it changes as we get older. I’ve also checked and corrected it. Overall, it’s very good! ^^
~ Teacher Gina
When I was young, meeting new people and make friends was very easy and natural without any effort.
>> When I was young, meeting new people and making friends was very easy and natural without any effort.
\'Just going to school\' was enough to meet and make friends.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Just going to school was enough to meet people and make friends.
But after I graduated university and started my career, meeting new people was not the same things as I was a student.
>> But after I graduated from university and started my career, meeting new people was not the same as when I was a student.
Most of the cases meeting new people were related to my job.
>> In most cases, meeting new people was related to my job.
I met many people but never made friends from it.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I met many people, but I never became friends with them.
If I finished my job, many people who I\'ve known would be separated from me.
>> When I finished a job, many people I knew would no longer stay in contact with me.
>> Or: My work relationships tend to disappear once the job ends.
I get older,I think meeting new people is like a little chance passed by me.
>> As I get older, I think meeting new people is like a small chance passing me by.
It could be a chance to make friends or not.
>> CORRECT.
But talking to new people usually opens another world from mine.
>> CORRECT.
It is exciting even though they wouldn\'t be my friends.
>> It is exciting even if they don’t become my friends.
Otherwise we often listen to the news about criminals in modern societies, there were so many scams, so many bad person.
>> On the other hand, we often hear news about criminals in modern societies. There are so many scams, so many bad people.
Is meeting new people dangerous? Where are the safe guides for it?
>> CORRECT.
I think we need to believe that most people are good person like me. It\'s the key for safe meeting.
>> I think we need to believe that most people are good like me. It\'s the key for a safe meeting.
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