Memories
학생이 쓴 원문
Theme: [ESSAY] What\'s your best memory with your grandparents?
It was climbing mountains.
I used to climb mountains with my grandmother.
But now, we can\'t because of Covid-19.
I like climbing mountains because when I climb mountains, I feel that I\'m going healthier.
So I like memories about climbing mountains!
강사 첨삭
Here\'s your edited composition, [이름]! Your story sounds sweet. I can almost imagine you and your grandma mountain climbing! What a lovely sight!
Cheers,
Jean~~
Theme: [ESSAY] What\'s your best memory with your grandparents?
It was climbing mountains.
>> or: The best one so far is mountain climbing.
I used to climb mountains with my grandmother.
But now, we can\'t because of Covid-19.
>> I used to go mountain climbing with my grandmother, but we can\'t do that anymore because of Covid-19.
I like climbing mountains because when I climb mountains, I feel that I\'m going healthier.
>> I like mountain climbing because while doing this activity, I feel as if I\'m becoming healthier.
So I like memories about climbing mountains!
>> So I like my memories of mountain climbing with my grandma.
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