Mental health VS Physical health

2019-03-04 · 첨삭 강사 Tricia

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I think that mental health is more important than physical health if our mental system is unbalanced, then, you can\'t take care of your body. I am not saying that physical health issues are trivial. What I mean is that mental health is relatively nore important than physical health. I think the purpose of your life is finding your happiness. And happiness is not found from substantial matter in life but in your own soul. More dramatically speaking, I think that if you found your true inner peace, or love, than even if you got cancer, you would be happy and thankful in your lifetime.

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I think that mental health is more important than physical health if our mental system is unbalanced, then, you can\'t take care of your body.

>> CORRECT!

I am not saying that physical health issues are trivial.

>> CORRECT!

What I mean is that mental health is relatively nore important than physical health.

>> What I mean is that mental health is relatively more important than physical health.

I think the purpose of your life is finding your happiness.

>> CORRECT!

And happiness is not found from substantial matter in life but in your own soul.

>> CORRECT!

More dramatically speaking, I think that if you found your true inner peace, or love, than even if you got cancer, you would be happy and thankful in your lifetime.

>> More dramatically speaking, I think that if you found your true inner peace, or love, than even if you got cancer, you would be happy and thankful about your life.

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