Mention three things you have in your bucket list.

2019-11-14 · 첨삭 강사 Oneil

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I would like to tell you about things i have in my bucket list. I have a lots of things what i want to do such as sky diving, watching EPL in person and living in abroad. First, If i have a chance to living in the other country, i really want to live in the country. I was likely to experience new culture. That\'s why i want to live in abroad. second, I\'v been enjoyed to watching sports game since i was young. after that i\'v been dreamed that i will go to UK to watching EPL in person. third, I would like to go Switzerland to sky diving, I sometimes imagine skydiving looking at the Alps. and also I prefer to travelling, i want to go on a landmark tour. so, If i have chance to go Switzerland, whenever i want to go there.

강사 첨삭

Bucket list done! All you have to do is earn and do them. haha :)

I would like to tell you about things i have in my bucket list. 
>> I would like to tell you about the things I have on my bucket list. 

I have a lots of things what i want to do such as sky diving, watching EPL in person and living in abroad.
>> I have a lot of things that I want to do, such as sky diving, watching EPL in person, and living abroad.

First, If i have a chance to living in the other country, i really want to live in the country. I was likely to experience new culture. 
>> First, if I have a chance to live in another country, I really want to live in the countryside. It is likely for me to experience a new culture. 

That\'s why i want to live in abroad.
>> That\'s why I want to live abroad.

second, I\'v been enjoyed to watching sports game since i was young. after that i\'v been dreamed that i will go to UK to watching EPL in person.
>> Second, I\'ve been enjoying watching sports games since I was young. After that, I\'ve been dreaming to go to the UK and watch EPL in person.

third, I would like to go Switzerland to sky diving, I sometimes imagine skydiving looking at the Alps. 
>> Third, I would like to go to Switzerland and enjoy sky diving. I sometimes imagine skydiving while looking at the Alps. 

and also I prefer to travelling, i want to go on a landmark tour. so, If i have chance to go Switzerland, whenever i want to go there.
>> And also, I love travelling. I want to go on a landmark tour. So, if I have a chance to go to Switzerland, I would love to go there.

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