middle school students

2021-08-02 · 첨삭 강사 Aki

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They havs high presure on the result of the estiimation. Some of them suffer from a mental depressinn and even suicide. This is not a personal and private prombles but a kind of social diseases. We, as adult have to change.

강사 첨삭

Hello Ms. [이름]. Thank you for writing your thoughts today :) stay well!
Aki:)
They havs high presure on the result of the estiimation.
>>> They have a high pressure on the result of estimation.
OR >>> They are being pressured on the result of examinations
Some of them suffer from a mental depressinn and even suicide.
>>> Some of them suffer from mental depression and even commit suicide.
This is not a personal and private prombles but a kind of social diseases.
>>> This is not a personal and private problem but a kind of social disease.
>>> This is not personal and private problems but a kind of social disease.
We, as adult have to change.
>>> We, as adults have to change.
>>> We, adults must change.

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