Military Service

2022-03-25 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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I think it is important to serve the military service in Korea. Because Korea is war country, so I think it is importable to men to go serve military service.

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Yes, that\'s true. This is for the safety and protection of South Korea against other countries that wants to colonize it.

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I think it is important to serve the military service in Korea.

>> I think it is important to serve the military service in Korea because our country is in war.

Because Korea is war country, so I think it is importable to men to go serve military service.

>> This is why I think that it is important for men to serve the military.

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