Military service in Korea
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A celebrity's scandal about avoiding the military service is on the fire in Korean society. In Korea, all men have to serve the military service in their 20's for two years. It is a huge damege for them since they lose two years regarldless of their will. So, if somebody serves the military serive in a right way or not is always a hot issuse such as at secreening for officials or for celebrities. First of all, Korean peninsula is literally on armistice so that we need to keep our military force strong. Furthermore, all citizens have the military duty so that all Koreans have to serve the military service in any ways. Therefore, if it turned out he extracted his teeth deliberately in order to avoid that, he needs to take responsibilities for his behavior.
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Good Day [이름]J
I understand that it is a must for men to attend the military service.
I hope that you would have a great weekend.
NicoleJ
A celebrity's scandal about avoiding the military service is on the fire in Korean society.
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In Korea, all men have to serve the military service in their 20's for two years.
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It is a huge damege for them since they lose two years regarldless of their will.
>> It is a huge damage for them since they will loose two years of their life regardless of their will.
So, if somebody serves the military serive in a right way or not is always a hot issuse such as at secreening for officials or for celebrities.
>> So, if somebody serves the military service in a right way or not, is always a hot issue such as screening for officials or for celebrities.
First of all, Korean peninsula is literally on armistice so that we need to keep our military force strong.
>>Correct
Furthermore, all citizens have the military duty so that all Koreans have to serve the military service in any ways.
>>Correct
Therefore, if it turned out he extracted his teeth deliberately in order to avoid that, he needs to take responsibilities for his behavior.
>>Correct
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